Hi ListenToMyMusic
It's interesting that you have chosen to remake a track, because this means it's more about the reproduction of sounds than the actual composition itself. But I will try to make as accurate of a review as possible.
Based on the actual song, I can say that your repeated patterns are generally pleasing to the ear, but it lacks a certain fluidity that a lot of house/trance tracks have. You can hear the individual textures, but I'm not sure if they "mesh" well.
Your skill in mixing, etc. is pretty decent. I wouldn't say professional level yet, but getting there. Just keep learning stuff about EQ, compression, automation, etc. (not that I am that good at it either) but I can see you becoming a very good musician.
It's emotional, but it doesn't evoke extra-strong feelings from me. It seems like it's just exploring the same subject as a lot of other electronic music without providing a new and unique take on it. But at least it's not gimmicky or full of distractions, it has a nice structure.
The theme is semi-catchy, but it would help to learn some professional skills to make your mix "pop" more, or have more flow. Thanks for letting me listen to your nice tune.
Cool.