Hi MadMath
The synth at the beginning has a lot of harsh high-end. The arp that comes in at 00:15 sounds very Kavinsky-like (Nightcall). Oh wow. That lead at 0:35 is very popping. I love your sense of melody. Pretty much everyone's crap at mix-mastering, that's half the battle, so I feel your pain there. 1:05 those strings are pretty potent. It's very wish-washy, you could work on getting some clarity amongst the instruments, but that's always a hard thing. Something about cutting instruments at various EQs to make room for the same instruments to boost at that same EQ. Not that I'm pro at that either.
1:43 Good vibes. Reminds me of nearing the end of "Giorgio by Moroder" on the latest Daft Punk album, Random Access Memories. Where the synths are competing for power. I like the progression in this track, and the addition of orchestral strings at points such as 2:15. The synth at 2:35 is very chiptune-Anamanaguchi, and I like it a lot. Throw in some pitch-bend on that synth and I reckon you'll have a winner. I just wish it came earlier on in the piece.
Plus, the ending isn't shitty at all. It's pretty triumphant.